JimBee Posted July 13, 2008 Author Posted July 13, 2008 Remember, folks, post non-related stroy stuff in a different color . Great pic, Oky Wan, just amazing!! To Skipper: None of us can recreate your character accurately because its a custom. A few options would be: change the torso to a regular commander, found in the BPs, change the head to ExoBuilder's sig-fig (the one with the six o' clock shave), and use a different visor. I will be able to get the RGS or AT-TE soon, so the helmet is okay. And I don't understand your question/ statement about the names, please clarify. To MacK: Great writing so far!
Lt. Col. Thok Posted July 14, 2008 Posted July 14, 2008 Sorry, I've been gone for a few days and forgot to check this thread. Nice images! I like them both very much. When shall we continue the Utapu storyline for the group?
MacK Posted July 14, 2008 Posted July 14, 2008 MacK do you mind if I build on your cell thingy idea, it might be aesier for me to add in my Obi-Wan thing then because it's on Utapau I think? I'm not quite sure what you mean; if you mean introducing Obi-Wan into our story, that could end up drastically changing our story line which may cause a few other problems, so I would probably say no. But before I can properly answer; can you explain a bit more on what you're asking, thanks in advance .
Skipper 24 Posted July 14, 2008 Posted July 14, 2008 What I meant by the names is that on the first page on this thread you have all the players names. By there name you could put a small pic of there character.
Oky Posted July 14, 2008 Posted July 14, 2008 (edited) MacK do you mind if I build on your cell thingy idea, it might be aesier for me to add in my Obi-Wan thing then because it's on Utapau I think? I'm not quite sure what you mean; if you mean introducing Obi-Wan into our story, that could end up drastically changing our story line which may cause a few other problems, so I would probably say no. But before I can properly answer; can you explain a bit more on what you're asking, thanks in advance . I don't really understand what you're saying either, Skipper. Right now, I think it would be a bad time for you to come into our story since we are already out of the "cell thingy" and are about to fight for our lives in the pit fighting arena. once we are out of there, though, you are welcome to join our group. PS: Is my character the link to your mission with Obi-Wan? I am his cousin after all. Hehe, just a guess. You don't need to answer. Edited July 16, 2008 by Oky Wan Kenobi
JimBee Posted July 14, 2008 Author Posted July 14, 2008 What I meant by the names is that on the first page on this thread you have all the players names. By there name you could put a small pic of there character. Please follow the rules by typing in a different color when youre talking about something unrelated to the story. Butcher to team: Alright, lets move out! [Takes out his pistol and shoots the two security droids outside, then walks to the building] Butcher: Hm... [Takes out his nail gun, and sticks the nail through the crack of the two doors, and fires at the control panel and alarm inside. The nail hits it, and the doors open. Butcher to team: alright, switch to rappel, were going through the vents. [switches his gun to rappel, and fires at the vent above them. He pulls, and the metal come off, revealing a hole in the ceiling.] Butcher to all: quick, they would have heard that. Clones, stay outside. Thok and Annix, come with me. [They shoot their grappling hooks, and climb into the ceiling. They begin to crawl through the small vents.] Butcher to both: Wait... [He stops at another metal casing, and looks through the tiny holes. He sees the Bounty Hunter walking and talking with the drug dealer, but then the hunter stops, and looks at the place where Butcher is watching. The hunter pulls out a blaster, and shoots the vent off, causing Butcher to fall out, along with his comrades. Butcher: ...Dammit! Hunter: Looks like someones been snooping around too much... Kaeder, take him to the cells!
brickbreaker Posted July 15, 2008 Posted July 15, 2008 the cells are on corosaunt, and i cant post pics! but i can put a vid on bbcck, my bros u tube acount (i asked and he said only if he pressents it ( he loves lego and follows the story, bless him
Skipper 24 Posted July 15, 2008 Posted July 15, 2008 (edited) sorry MacK I keep doing my story in red and not the non-story parts. Edited July 15, 2008 by Skipper 24
Lt. Col. Thok Posted July 16, 2008 Posted July 16, 2008 Thok *raises hands reluctantly, but sneakily places tracking device on wall*: Damn. Well, it could be worse. Hunter: WORSE???! You want worse? I'll give you worse... *grabs Thok's arms, twists them 360 degrees* Thok: ALRIGHT ALRIGHT ALRIGHT! I surrender! Hunter: Now, MARCH!
Oky Posted July 16, 2008 Posted July 16, 2008 the cells are on corosaunt, and i cant post pics! but i can put a vid on bbcck, my bros u tube acount (i asked and he said only if he pressents it ( he loves lego and follows the story, bless him I don't understand what cells you're refering to. Can you (or someone) please explain this to me? About your pics, I recommend using Flickr.
JimBee Posted July 16, 2008 Author Posted July 16, 2008 I don't understand what cells you're refering to. Can you (or someone) please explain this to me?About your pics, I recommend using Flickr. Please use different color when talking about unrelated story stuff. [As they walked to a cell block hallway, the Bounty Hunter took all of the teams equipment. Hunter to Butcher: My, arent you the expert? Hunter to Annix: A sword? Not going to get very far with a piece of metal, I think. Hunter to Thok: What are you, some sort of city folk, wearing leather like that? Butcher to Hunter: A republic officer, for your information! Hunter to Butcher: You speak only if I grant you permission! Now, into the cell! [The Bounty Hunter shoves them into the large, force feilded cell, with four concrete beds, and one toilet with a black sheet around it. It looked like the end for the team...] Hunter to all: Youll be dealt with later.
brickbreaker Posted July 16, 2008 Posted July 16, 2008 (edited) i waqs talking about the pit. the pits are on corasaunt. oh, and im not sure how it connects to the main story, im using it to get in. oh, and i was going to post the fight, but you can by all means. edit: forgot color, sorry http://www.flickr.com/photos/28667661@N03/2674420955/color] Edited July 16, 2008 by brickbreaker
Oky Posted July 16, 2008 Posted July 16, 2008 (edited) i waqs talking about the pit. the pits are on corasaunt. oh, and im not sure how it connects to the main story, im using it to get in. oh, and i was going to post the fight, but you can by all means.edit: forgot color, sorry http://www.flickr.com/photos/28667661@N03/2674420955/color] Oh. I thought this whole time that it was on Utapau. So, does this mean that while MacK and I were unconcious, we were transported back to Coruscant? That kind of sucks since we won't be able to help the others now. Well, at least we can meet up with Skipper24 and some other players instead, I guess. However, you can go ahead with posting the fight; I am kinda busy since my school started again. That's a cool Comic Game ad you made there! You should post it in your sig! You might want to shoose a more readable color for the writing, though. Btw, if you want the color in your posts to work, you have to make sure that you have something like this after your post: [/color] Edited July 17, 2008 by Oky Wan Kenobi
MacK Posted July 17, 2008 Posted July 17, 2008 (edited) Oh. I thought this whole time that it was on Utapau. So, does this mean that while MacK and I were unconcious, we were transported back to Coruscant? That kind of sucks since we won't be able to help the others now. Well, at least we can meet up with Skipper24 and some other players instead, I guess. However, you can go ahead with posting the fight; I am kinda busy since my school started again. Okay so we are now on Coruscant (I was also under the impression that we were on Utapau). Hmm well that changes some of plans as I was thinking that Oky Wan you and I were going to help JimButcher Thok and Annix. Unless they too, are being transported to Coruscant, in which case we can still help them. Also Oky Wan it appears that brickbreaker has been chambered, so you'll have to post the pit fight sadly . Although I realize that if you are indeed swamped with school work, I could probably post the pit fight, its just that I would probably butcher it in terms of photo quality, the overall scene . However if you do really want me to do the pit fight pm me, along with your design for the sharkman that you mentioned to me earlier, and I’ll try my best to do the scene . Edited July 17, 2008 by MacK
JimBee Posted July 17, 2008 Author Posted July 17, 2008 (edited) Wait... we are still on Utapau... who said that we werent? The CIS are holding Oky Wan, Mack, and Brickbreaker captive in one area, and me, Thok, and Annix in another area. Death Star is hunting Obi Wan... apparently... and simonjedi I have no clue... and wouwie is all the way on hoth... Edited July 17, 2008 by JimButcher
Oky Posted July 17, 2008 Posted July 17, 2008 Ok, now I'm totally confused! Damn you, brickbreaker! JK. But I think that we should continue the story as if the pit fighting arena was on Utapau all along since anything else would be too confusing. And since I have some time again, I will post the fight. I'll work on it tonight!
simonjedi Posted July 17, 2008 Posted July 17, 2008 (edited) quote name='Skipper 24' post='328117' date='Jul 13 2008, 06:49 PM'] Here is some more Story... The mysterious partner told him the mission, which was to eliminate Obi-Wan Kenobi who was stationed in an industrial area on Utapau. 0024 fly's over to Coruscant and tracks down Kenobi. He finds Kenobi on a hovering platform, Kenobi salutes to him because he thinks he is a clone. 0024 has very similar armour to Cody because he is his pod brother. watch this vid of how he tries to take down Obi. Please watch it, sorry there is no sound though I couldn't really find anything that fitted. Simons slight alteration to make it seem sense: feel free to use this or completely disregard this: I've thought he was hired by dath sideous to eliminate obi wan to turn Anakin to the dark side (he does it in the film, invisible hand after dooku duel and getting him sent to eliminate grevious). He kills a clone belonging to Obi wans battalion and steals his armour to infiltrate the battalion. AFAIK most people are still on on Utapau, I'm still in the game i was just making my way to them, but now i'm in it now, (see below) "Get in there, republic scum!" shouted the guard as his bodyguard pushed garviel into the cell, Garviel hit the ground with a thud and looked around as the iron gate slammed down. Loken sighed and stood up, and noticed three other prisoners staring at him in shock, "Hi, i'm MacK" said the prisoner wearing dusty clothes "welcome to the "pre-pit"" he smirked darkly "don't worry you won't be here long" "Nice to meet you I'm Garviel Loken. Guess i'm a late entry" he smirked back "i guessed you tracked our ship" muttered a prisoner wearing a mechanics uniform, "sorry about that" "don't worry about it, you're loyal to the republic, i had to make contact" "i'm Oky wan by the way" "So republic commando, any chance of calling the jedi to help us out" MacK mumbled sarcastically. "I probably could, but remember what happened when the jedi had to rescue someone else" I deadpanned "i do have something that might help us though" Garviel reached in his mouth and pulled out two silver capsules, and held them up, ignoring the disgusted looks of his fellow cellmates "compact EMP and Flash grenades we'll be able to startle any battle droids and whatever they throw at them" "i have a blaster pistol if that helps" Mack muttered "It only has a few shots left, but with your grenades we might be able to come up with a plan" Before anyone had an idea, the grated door began to creak open and Garviel saw the dusty arena for the first time. Edited August 8, 2008 by simonjedi
Oky Posted July 17, 2008 Posted July 17, 2008 (edited) Nice to see that you're still with us, simonjedi! It's also good that you have teamed up with Jim and the others now, but unfortunately, there are some mistakes in your post. If you would have followed the last few posts, you would know that Mack and I are now out of the cell and in the arena already, while brickbreaker (his character's name is Xela Mirinatan btw) is making his way through the tunnels below us. Therefore, I will have to ask you kindly to remove Mack's, brickbreaker's, and my sentences from your post. And your explanation of Skipper24's Obi Wan affair does make sense. Thanks! Edited July 18, 2008 by Oky Wan Kenobi
simonjedi Posted July 17, 2008 Posted July 17, 2008 (edited) Nice to see that you're still with us, simonjedi! It's also good that you have teamed up with Jim and the others now, but unfortunately, there are some mistakes in your post. If you would have followed the last few posts, you would know that Mack and I are now out of the cell and in the arena already, while brickbreaker (his character's name is Xela Mirinatan btw) is making his way through the tunnels below us. Therefore, I will have to ask you kindly to remove Mack's, brickbreaker's, and my sentences from your post.And your explanation of Skipper24's Obi Wan affair does make sense. Thanks! will rename it for you It doesn't actually say that they are in the arena, from this quote "MacK woke up in a dark room with only a little light coming in from a gated door. All around him, he could hear the thunderous voices of thousands of aliens all around him. It took only a moment to register where he was. In the arena; where in only a few minutes he would be forced to fight for his life." tells me they are in a room outside the main arena (bit like on ep2 where Anakin and Padme admit their love) thats where my post is set, i'll replace the forcefield with a door so it looks like i've been captured and thrown in as a last minute entry. Does anyone mind if i keep the post as is? ican't think of anything else and its only a few plot holes Edited July 17, 2008 by simonjedi
Oky Posted July 17, 2008 Posted July 17, 2008 (edited) Alright, that's fine then! I'm building the pit arena now. I should have it up by tonight. Oh, and also, when you post in the future, please don't write in first person. This game is like a story that is being told by us, and not from the POV of each of the different characters. Edited July 18, 2008 by Oky Wan Kenobi
JimBee Posted July 18, 2008 Author Posted July 18, 2008 Alright, now everything is settled. MacK and Oky Wan are on thier way to the pit fight (Gladiator style! ) [remember, simonjedi, nobody has any weapons, they were taken away, besides your flash capsules. The CIS wouldn't be stupid enough to let them keep their weapons] and brickbreaker is underneath in the tunnels, which he got into by digging, while Butcher, Annix, and Thok are locked up in the secret base. Remember to use colored text when explaining something about the story, folks. It gets really confusing if you dont. Butcher to Thok: So I saw that little silver disc you took out, a tracking device? Thok to Butcher: Yep, I'm sending the coordinates to Oky Wan's comm link. {Flashback: Butcher, after landing on Utapau} *Beep, beep* [butcher picks up his comlink as it alerts him that someone is calling it.] Butcher: Yes? Oky Wan: Commander, its me, Oky Wan. Ive met up with a few Republic allies, and we are almost in the atmosphere, so we'll meet up with you, alright? Butcher: Wait, what kind of allies? Oky Wan: Never mind that, just send me the coordinates, alright? Butcher: Yeah, let me get the location.................. alright, here they are. Oky Wan: Alright, good.
JimBee Posted July 19, 2008 Author Posted July 19, 2008 sorry, double post. But I would like to say that I will be gone at camp for 7 days, so I won't be back until Saturday next week (and then I'm getting an RGS once I get back! ) So, for the story, just pretend I'm there. See you guys!
Oky Posted July 20, 2008 Posted July 20, 2008 (edited) The Super Battle Droid who opened the door for them ordered Oky Wan, Mack, and Garviel to step out. They did as they were told and stood now in front of the deep, square pit that took up most of the cavern-like arena. At the sides of it, there were bleachers filled with all of Utapau's underworld scum. After estimating the depth of the pit, Oky Wan turned to Mack and asked: "Er, Mack... about your plan... Did you ever think about how we are going to get the sharakan out of the pit and into the audience?" "Oh," said Mack surprised, "uhm... actually..." But he had no time to finish mumbling because in that moment, the Super Battle Droid had snuck up on them and pushed them over the edge into the pit. They landed on the hard ground, but fortunately didn't take any real damage. As they looked up, they could see Draze & Garr smirking down on them. "They wont be laughing for long," thought Mack. After they got back on their feet, a man who introduced himself as Doc Russo spoke to the audience through a microphone: "Ladies and Gentle-aliens, welcome to the Utapau Pit Fighting Arena! Today, we have a very special selection of competitors: One of them is a sharakan, a beast that is half shark and half man!" The crowd cheered. "The other is a group of Republic spies that we have caught trying to expose our activities here!" The crowd booed and started to chant "Kill them". After a moment, Russo carried on: "Now, I hope that you have all placed your bets! Let the fight begin!" The crowd began cheering again, this time much louder. With a crane that was mounted to the ceiling, a Utai worker lowered a big cage into the pit that contained the hybrid beast. In that moment, Mack got an idea: "Hey, guys, I think I know how to get the sharakan out of here now!" Behind his back, he slowly pulled out the blaster he "borrowed" from Garr... He waited until the cage touched the ground. Then, he quickly shot the cable on the hook of the cage, so that the Utai couldn't pull the cage back up. "Good," said Mack, "Now all we need to do is..." But in that moment, the creature in front of them started to rage in its cage. It hit repeatedly against the gate that kept him locked inside, and after the fifth hit or so, the lock on the bars finally broke. The sharakan pushed the gate open, steped outside, and got on his hind legs to show all of its might. "Watch out," shouted Garviel to the others, "This guy looks hungry!" The monster moved slowly toward them, growling all the way. Then, all of a sudden and with shark-like reflexes, it leaped forward. Mack and Garviel could jump aside just in time, but Oky Wan was too slow; the beast already had him in his muscular arms. Hanging upside-down, he belowed to his friends: "Er, guys... A LITTLE HELP?" "Don't worry," said Mack, "I'm on it!" He aimed his blaster at a point slightly above Garr and fired a few shots until he ran out of ammo. Garr, Draze, and the crowd around them started to panic and screamed. All that noise made the sharakan so nervous that he dropped Oky Wan. After a while, it didn't seem to be able to take much more of the noise and ran toward the source of it. The beast climbed onto the cage, and from there onto the edge of the pit. It started to snap at the crowd, who was now really in panic, and finally got a hold on Garr's leg. While Garr screamed in pain, Draze watched helplessly as his partner got eaten alive. "Serves him right" muttered Mack and dropped down the empty blaster. In that moment, a pick broke through the dry ground and out of the hole came... "Xela! You made it!" said Oky Wan. "Who the heck is that?" asked Garviel. "One of the other pit fighting slaves," explained Mack, "he is helping us to escape. Now let's blow this dump!" Xela got back into the hole and, one after the other, the rest followed him. They now walked through the mines that Xela has been forced to work in all this time. To their surprise, it was illuminated by the glowing from the chrystals that were coming out of the rock all around them. "Xela, are those the chrystals that you were to harvest?" asked Oky Wan. "Yes," said Xela, "but as I said, I have no idea what the seperatists want with them - they're worthless." Oky Wan turned to Mack and whispered into his ear: "I think they might be part of the time machine. I'll take one with me for examination." So, he broke one of them out of the rock and let it slide into his pocket. As the gang could see a light at the end of the tunnel, Xela told them: "We're almost there." When they reached the end, they stepped outside and felt the Sun warm their skin. But once their eyes got used to the day light, they noticed that they were surrounded by Super Battle Droids! "Hey, Garviel, do you still have those flash grenades?" Mack asked hopefully. Garviel searched his pockets, but couldn't find them. "Dammit!" he said, "I must have dropped them when we fell into the pit!" "Great," said Oky Wan, "What now?" And the moral of this episode is "Don't be a traitor, or else you'll get eaten by sharkmen." I hope you liked it. Sorry for the poor scenery, but as I said, I am a little busy right now. I hope the sharakan is OK, though. If I had this Harry Potter set, I would have used the Victor Krum fig, but I think it looks more menacing this way. And have fun at camp, Jim, I'll wach out that nobody does anything stupid around here while you're gone! Edited July 20, 2008 by Oky Wan Kenobi
Lt. Col. Thok Posted July 20, 2008 Posted July 20, 2008 sorry, double post. But I would like to say that I will be gone at camp for 7 days, so I won't be back until Saturday next week (and then I'm getting an RGS once I get back! ) So, for the story, just pretend I'm there. See you guys! Lucky kid! Yep, we'll keep the thread "in check".
MacK Posted July 22, 2008 Posted July 22, 2008 The six captives, including Mendis and Zues who had rejoined them near the entrance of the tunnel froze as several Super battle droids surrounded them. "Damn how do they always seem to find us?" muttered MacK. "I have no idea" said Xela as he looked around for a way to escape "Maybe we should run back inside the tunnel" Xela said. "Back to the pit no way, thats a bad idea, but look over there, there is a supply speeder if we could somehow get into that we could get out of here" Oky Wan said pointing towards a small supply speeder. "Roger roger it seems that we found some captives trying to escape lets bring them back to the cells for questioning" follow us or we will be forced to annihilate you one off the battle droids said as he started to walk down a path that must of led to the cells that they were just in. Finally MacK found something that could serve as a distraction for him and his friends to escape. "Droids look over there at what that guy is doing". "Roger rog... oh my god that guy is walking on the grass when clearly that sign says to stay off the grass, get him off of it now!" one droid called out as he started running towards him "Soon the man noticed the droids running towards him and instead of running he stood his ground, and started to speak " I isn’t getting of this here grass, until you droids get off of my planet, you hearing what I'm saying you pile of bolts. I've lived here my entire life, and I've served for my planet..." "Blast him!" "roger roger" Several lasers filled the air before hitting and killing the patriotic man. Seizing the opportunity for escape all of the captives ran to the speeder, Oky Wan took up the drivers seat and was busy hot wiring it. While everyone else took their seats and threw out some unneeded equipment that the speeder carried. "Got it" Oky Wan said proudly as the speeder brust to life. "We got company" called garviel as the super battle droids ran back to the cave entrance and started firing at the speeder. "Here I'll take care of them" Oky Wan said as he made a sharp turn with the speeder, crashing into and breaking the battle droids. "That’s for locking me up" called Oky Wan. "Hey guys where are we going to go" the CIS will start looking everywhere for us, not to mention that they will kill us when they do find us." said Oky Wan. "We should head back to our ship so we can get off planet, and met up with some Republic forces; I doubt its far from here, probably still in the hanger we left it in, Xela do you know where the nearest space port is since that’s probably where our ship is?" MacK asked, as he was carefully reading the contents of one of the crates that were left on the speeder. "Yeah I think I do its not to far we can probably get to it in about half an hour with a bit of luck" Xela said. "Alright then tell me the way said Oky Wan as he looked ahead of him". "Teehehe", "what are you laughing at MacK" inquired Xela. "Guys you know this crate is packed full of mining explosives, I think I'm going to have some fun with these before we leave utapau hehe."
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