Niloc Posted June 7, 2015 Posted June 7, 2015 (edited) CHAPTER 1: DAWN OF THE RED SUN On a race to become the most powerful corporation, mysterious KAWASHITA GROUP lastly arrives in the Andromeda system. Setting foot on flourishing planet ORINSHI, the enterprise briskly sends its fleet to the four corners of space, ready to conquer unknown paths filled with undiscutable richness, and that, by all means… ---------- Log 1 - Sunset On the Future With its new cybernetic legs operational, Kawashita pilot N.R Marcus leaves Orinshi with the Second Branch’s colonial fleet. They stop on Greater Direstan as the sytem’s sun sets on the horizon… ---------- The journey was long and hard. I've been stuck for 2 weeks in metal containers. First was Orinshi's medical center... Can you believe it: facing such beautiful surroundings, luxuriant jungles, grassy plains and extraordinary wildlife, but unable to touch 'em. Every morning I jumped out of bed, forgetting that my legs are gone. I hopelessly crash on the floor. Repeat. Repeat. Repeat. I just couldn't remember. A very weird feeling to experiment. Then, it was the journey to Greater Direstan when the 2nd branch colonial ship picked me up. I tell ya' that was one heck of a bumpy ride. I've heard marvels of our warp drives, but they're far from perfect, they're irregularly stabilized. Bumpy... And I couldn't move out of bed, recovering from my earlier surgery. At least, when I jumped out of bed this morning I landed on my feet. They're a bit clunky and cold, but I'll get used to it. When our ship finally landed on the rocky outpost, I had to get out, to feel fresh air, new air. I staggered to the closest opened deck. My legs were still hurting and wobbling but I forgot it all when I reached the outside deck. The sea was pitch black and the sky burning yellow. Everything was clear, peaceful, strange and lonely. I knew Terra was far, far away... "N.R Marcus, you are required in Bay 05 for mission briefing." I woke up from my trance. Well, beauty doesn't last. How long was I there looking at the horizon? A minute? An hour? I was about to leave for Bay 05 when I received another transmission - coded: "Marcus, I hope you enjoyed your trip! My name is Mr. Nagashi, from the council. Meet me in office 343 as soon as possible. I have a mission for you. High priority" I stood there, surprised... The council? Did he say he was... from the council?! It can't be. Just what could they be doing on a colonial fleet? And they would call me of all things? It's not right... They're up to something. The sunset of Greater Direstan I tried to force the perspective with this build, but it's hard to make the illusion! I had a more detailed background at first and the "Ship deck" extends with details to the back. But taking it all in one shot proved futile (too crowded), so I scrapped everything and went with very simple elements, which ended a bit better ** This build is inspired by Kosmas Santosa's (one of my favourite builders) Senja (https://www.flickr.com/photos/kosmassantosa/16605586408/in/faves-131957354@N02/). I tried to give it a sci-fi twist. I wish my colors were as vibrant, but I don't have artificial light yet... ** More details and behind-the-scene pictures to come! Edited June 8, 2015 by Niloc Quote
Dannylonglegs Posted June 7, 2015 Posted June 7, 2015 This is probably my favorite build so far. I am humbled by the elegance and vision of this. ~Insectoid Aristocrat Quote
mccoyed Posted June 7, 2015 Posted June 7, 2015 Very, very cool idea. I love the ship design and I like the cartoon effect of the bright colors to represent the sunset. It feels like an animation still or something from a comic book. I do think you should reread your story and address grammar and spelling issues, though. Quote
Zepher Posted June 8, 2015 Posted June 8, 2015 I have to agree. I love when art can be brought into LEGO, as is done here. The miniatures are gorgeous, but the sky is absolutely what sells the build. Quote
Niloc Posted June 8, 2015 Author Posted June 8, 2015 Thanks everyone, glad you like it in some different ways! [...] You should reread your story and address grammar and spelling issues, though. Thank you for noticing! When I write without slowly proof reading I can make a lot of grammar and typing mistakes... I even made up some words! My corrector is in french though, so it doesn't help. I should change that. Well, I tried to fix what I could. If you find any other mistake, I'd be glad to correct them again and learn. I love when art can be brought into LEGO, as is done here. Thank you, I couldn't hope for a better compliment! Quote
Dardanel Posted June 8, 2015 Posted June 8, 2015 Epic :D I like the idea, I like the execution, i like everything! Quote
shmails Posted June 8, 2015 Posted June 8, 2015 Really nice idea and I love the sun and the reflection on the black bricks. Cool! Quote
Big Sal Posted June 8, 2015 Posted June 8, 2015 Very nice! I like how you used a limited colour palette to great effect! Quote
Dragonfire Posted June 8, 2015 Posted June 8, 2015 Wow, I love the forced perspective - looks like a painting Quote
MassEditor Posted June 8, 2015 Posted June 8, 2015 Very beautiful sunset, one of the better I've seen in LEGO form. The forced perspective is quite nicely done and the first photo sells it so well - I almost feel as if I'm standing next to Marcus on the catwalk. The various details are fun to view as well, especially those two ships and the snot rocks. I really enjoyed the story too. Reminds me of a few friends who lost limbs fighting in Iraq and Afghanistan. They struggle to cope with their injuries yet still have the courage and strength to poke fun at themselves and still pick themselves up everyday and enjoy life. Yours is a touching story and well presented. One small bit of advice I would share concerning the forced perspective: I think shortening the depth of field in this photo and thereby making the background a tad bit more blurry would help with some of the issues you expressed. Shooting the background out of focus would most likely eliminate the visible lines between the yellow bricks and obscure the details enough to give a better perspective of a sun setting in the distant horizon. The light given off by something as large as a star is quite hazy so you don't want those details to be sharp in the photo. Just a small suggestion for an otherwise excellent build! Quote
TheUtilityBelt Posted June 8, 2015 Posted June 8, 2015 You did great on the forced perspective and now I'm gonna have to try it! Quote
pombe Posted June 9, 2015 Posted June 9, 2015 Brilliant idea and even better execution! Terrific forced perspective and story to go along with it! Quote
Niloc Posted June 10, 2015 Author Posted June 10, 2015 (edited) Thanks again everyone! I wasn't totally happy with it but I'm really thrilled you like it I really enjoyed the story too. Reminds me of a few friends who lost limbs fighting in Iraq and Afghanistan. They struggle to cope with their injuries yet still have the courage and strength to poke fun at themselves and still pick themselves up everyday and enjoy life. Yours is a touching story and well presented. One small bit of advice I would share concerning the forced perspective: I think shortening the depth of field in this photo and thereby making the background a tad bit more blurry would help with some of the issues you expressed. Wow, that anecdote of yours really suprised me... Very, very touching parallel! And thank you for the advice! I really like it when someone tells me how he would improve the project. I'll try my hands at it before reducing the build to brick-ashes. :thumbup: Edited June 10, 2015 by Niloc Quote
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