Commander Beltar Posted November 30, 2015 Posted November 30, 2015 (edited) The story so far: First Day Aboard the Avenger At The Table-Before The Storm Rescue Mission Reassigned Eliminating The Competition Target Practice “Here we go again…” Evac Escape A Quick Transaction "Black Sunshine" Repel and Retreat With Beltar’s recent involvement with break-away organizations of the Black Sun, Beltar decided to cut his vacation short. Now we find Beltar with his team boarding the Suprosa after being briefed by none other than Commander Lucas Kirana, and being deployed one of the Empire’s top pilots, Artizan. But Beltar and his medical team may have gotten here a little too late to repel the enemy forces…As they head towards their objectives, it seems the Rebels may have gotten to the computers first. --Around 15 Minutes Ago-- Rebel Transmission: “We are boarding the Suprosa, we should be landing on what appeared to be a major computer station that should have direct access to the main databanks" Imagine this picture has space and more Suprosa hull. The Imperial Officer below heard the hissing of something strange above him…when suddenly he saw the spikes of the rebels modified Dorch-Class boarding ship run through the ceiling of the computer station! He thought he may have been safe, but then he saw the rebels cut an opening right above him… Rebel Commander: Alright boys! Get ready to move! Duros Rebel: We are ready to move in commander. Weequay Rebel: I’m all set. Human Rebel: Sir we are all ready. Remember that you two need to secure the hallway to stop any Imperial advancement. The rebel commander acknowledged this with an nod, and had his team drop below to suprosa surprise the officer beneath them. Hahaha! Terrible joke! Rebel Commander: You! Download the information onto this drive! Imperial Technician: I…I have no idea what you mean! The Rebel officer pointed the gun closer... And held out the disk in one hand. Imperial Technician: On-On second thought…I think I may have something for you. --Presently--Imperials--Location: 2 Corridors from Boarding and Escape Hangars-- Now we join our heroes who have just reached their first checkpoint, before the teams split up, but here they find an injured Storm Trooper, TK-941, and Beltar rushed to his service, instantly administering pain reliever to the soldier. As he treated this soldier, he noticed Lord Tyrus, one of the Shadow Troopers that was following them vanished. Hopefully he was following his objective. TK-941: Thank…you…They-They surprised my unit…My unit is a group of cowards! They all ran but me… Beltar: Save your strength soldier, the ship at the hanger should have more medical equipment that could help you. Sarge signaled the rather out of place Storm Trooper, ZW-461, to get TK-941 to the back-up ship awaiting at the hangar. TK-941: You’ve got to be kidding me lad! An Alien in storm trooper armor? Your unit has set the bar real low for the Empire! Sarge: We all can’t have the best units you know…Those aliens really don’t make us look uniform… Sarge’s eyes followed the nervous Zabrack as he got closer and started helping the wounded soldier get on his feet. Beltar himself never really understood why the Imperials hated having Aliens in their ranks, and Life Day has recently passed, a very alien centered holiday, it seems to annoy many Imperials...Sarge then turned around to speak to Kodan’s Team of pilots who were fixing a leaking power converter before heading off to the bridge, in an attempt to regain complete control of the ships movements. Sarge: Alright, I assume this is where we split up, you take Corridor AA1134 Left, we will head Right, and hopefully we can finish our jobs and get off this lost ship and hopefully we will be able to repel these rebels without any setbacks. Kodan nodded, and signaled us to follow. We eventually broke loose at the Corridor, and embarked on our path through these almost maze-like halls on the Suprosa. Beltar: Those stories about this ship being huge...It’s true. All of it. You know I just had to make another joke with FA. Sarge: Yeah, I was actually stationed here for a day because I transferred right out after seeing these hallways…Worst day on the job. Ever. As they continued down the winding corridors, they had almost arrived at their objective, when they came across a Gonk and Mouse droid: Beltar: What are these guys doing here? Sarge: I…I don’t know, Borris, this is on you, you’re the only one here who can understand these guys. They shouldn't be here. Unless they got lost. Borris gave a short laugh, then he began listening to these droids tales. Borris: Well, EG-89 tells me we got some rebels up ahead. And the mouse droid says. Wait. Their preparing to fire? How do you k-- Without warning, a shot hit Borris on the back of his helmet, Sarge and Beltar instantly rushed to the sides of the hallway. Beltar could eye 2 of them, one was about to come out of the door, but turned back instead. As this happened, the GNK droid waddled away while the mouse droid stayed to watch the show. Beltar: We have no cover out here! Sarge: Rush them, I’ll cover and then I’ll deal with Borris. Got it? Beltar nodded, and Sarge yelled: "Now!" Beltar instantly sprang forward, getting the upperhand on the sitting rebels. After some quick shots, Beltar realized and said to himself: “How did we not see these guys moving down this hallway?” Then he looked out of the corner of his eye and saw Sarge was already treating Borris. It seems Sarge really took this job and his unit very seriously. As long as they weren’t aliens it appears…And it looked like Beltar had to do a hopefully easy job, by himself…Beltar rushed into through the door, gun raised. Rebel Commander: Ha! We have the upperhand! The download just finished, move and I’ll shoot. Beltar gave a slight movement on the barrel of his blaster to signal the officer to get down. And as fast as a the Rebel Alliance falling into a trap, Beltar shot both of the two rebels, they lay on the ground dead. Beltar then realized, “these may be the first Rebels I’ve actually killed….Strange…It’s an odd feeling…” He then walked over to the officer and helped him up. Beltar: Is there any way to wipe this computer? And possibly the other databanks? Imperial Technician: Yes and no. We cannot wipe other databanks on this ship, but we can set up the manual override, just pull down that handle on the wall…And thank you. Beltar handed the Officer his gun while he pulled down the lever. The light on the computer went from green to red. It worked! But then Beltar saw that the Rebels did download something important onto the disk, as its display screen showed it was full, and it was attempting to decrypt the files. Beltar picked it up and just wondered, what was so important that we had to keep these Rebel’s from getting? Instead of breaking it apart…he just held it...He didn’t know why, but he just did. Beltar: Alright, we should get moving back to the escape ship. Hopefully it hasn’t left yet. Imperial Technician: Understood. Hope you took care of that disk. Too much valuable information to be fall into the Rebel’s hands. Beltar showed it to the officer in his hand, and the officer just smiled. To Beltar, this seemed rather odd. As they walked out, Beltar realized that Borris’s condition was serious. Beltar took off his med pack, unfolded it, and attacked it to the other pack. Sarge and Beltar then moved Borris’s body onto it and picked it up without saying a word. Sarge: Well. His condition is very serious, I’ll need better equipment. You, tech-officer. Imperial Technician: Yes? Sarge: Watch our backs, will you? And mouse droid…Hit me if rebels are coming in that way.Huh? Why I trust you? I don’t know…Well this is one fine setback, but at least we accomplished our goal. Repelling these guys. Beltar: Yeah, but this is also a retreat at the same time. They back-tracked their way to through the long and winding hallways to the back-up transport’s hangar, only to find it missing with a soldier laying against the wall unconscious and ZW no where to be seen. Beltar: Wonderful. Maybe we can hitch a ride home with Artizan when all troops are recalled. Unless Kodan and his team succeeds. -End- More Pictures in the spoiler: Hallway 1 Hallway 2 Room 1 Computer Room Overview 1… Overview 2 The 2 rooms without the floor, and with better lighting. Boarding Ship 1 Boarding Ship 2 And of course, the droids. There are some more closeups of certain shots on my flickr, thanks for reading/looking at these lots of pictures! This build underwent many changes…I was going to greeble the walls behind all of the build to make it more presentable as a whole, but I ran out of parts… Of course. The Rebel ship is based on the droid boarding ship from TCW, if anyone wants some detail pics, just ask. .I also couldn’t resist sneaking in a Force Awakens line in….hehehe…Only 3 weeks away, wow! Note: Any builders mentioned should be a way to tie them in, if it changed when they post their build, I'll edit this post. As always, C and C Welcome! ~Beltar Edit 1: Fixed Story Link after Builder Posted Edited December 1, 2015 by Commander Beltar Quote
Alfadas Posted November 30, 2015 Posted November 30, 2015 Very nice! Cool MOC! Love the crates as wall pieces, gives it a nice detailed look! Quote
Zaael Posted November 30, 2015 Posted November 30, 2015 Nice story and I like all the little builds. Quote
Nom Carver Posted November 30, 2015 Posted November 30, 2015 The layout of the hallways and rooms along with the CW boarding ship is brilliant, you achieved a lot in a very reduced space. Quote
Lord Tyrus Posted November 30, 2015 Posted November 30, 2015 I like the inclusion of the other team mates! Also, the little details like the wall pattern are great! Quote
Tariq j Posted November 30, 2015 Posted November 30, 2015 Very Nice work, I like the head you've used for the injured stormtrooper. Quote
LucasLaughing Posted December 1, 2015 Posted December 1, 2015 -------------------------------------------------------- After action report - prepared by Sgt. Kirana -------------------------------------------------------- Beltar and the team of combat medics performed their mission heroically, braving enemy fire to rescue their fallen comrades. In addition to saving Imperial lives, Beltar engaged and killed a number of rebels. ------------------------------------------------------- Wow, you've got great action shots here - nice work! You did a really good job on the minifig posing, and the little details like the brick-built stretcher really add to the build. My only critique would be that the boarding craft looks a little too "mountain-ish." I think if you added some greebles, or maybe tried some different slope combinations, it would look more like a vessel. Overall, though, this is an excellent entry. Quote
Vedauwoo Posted December 1, 2015 Posted December 1, 2015 Very very nice....love the xtra details....and the droids are awesome! Quote
goatman461 Posted December 1, 2015 Posted December 1, 2015 cool layout, I did feel a little bit lost during the first part of you story so an establishing shot would've helped. zooming in too much on the action hurts my brain a bit because i can't get a sense of the larger scene. I think there are some areas where you could've done more greebles and/or less printed tiles. if you connect the greebles more they won't stand out as much as individual parts, putting them in patterns helps, too. that door is excellent and the white/lbg walls have a nice repetition and smoothness to them. the dbg and trans red walls look great too, the best use of slopes is definitely in that upper level room where the transport has smashed through. I agree that the transport body is a bit too mountain-like. some curved bricks may have helped that some, or large wheels. Quote
Commander Beltar Posted December 4, 2015 Author Posted December 4, 2015 Very nice! Cool MOC! Love the crates as wall pieces, gives it a nice detailed look! Thanks! Nice story and I like all the little builds. Thank you! Some of the mini details like the droids where some of the really fun parts to build! The layout of the hallways and rooms along with the CW boarding ship is brilliant, you achieved a lot in a very reduced space. Thank you Nom Carver! Originally the layout would have been very different, but some guys gave me suggestions in the Comm Channel. I like the inclusion of the other team mates! Also, the little details like the wall pattern are great! It was a lot of fun to add in references to everyones build, as it meant I'd have to make it fit with what everyone was doing while not looking to forced! Very Nice work, I like the head you've used for the injured stormtrooper. The funny thing is, that's actually the opposite side of Borris's head from a previous build! -------------------------------------------------------- After action report - prepared by Sgt. Kirana -------------------------------------------------------- Beltar and the team of combat medics performed their mission heroically, braving enemy fire to rescue their fallen comrades. In addition to saving Imperial lives, Beltar engaged and killed a number of rebels. ------------------------------------------------------- Wow, you've got great action shots here - nice work! You did a really good job on the minifig posing, and the little details like the brick-built stretcher really add to the build. My only critique would be that the boarding craft looks a little too "mountain-ish." I think if you added some greebles, or maybe tried some different slope combinations, it would look more like a vessel. Overall, though, this is an excellent entry. Thank you Sgt. Kirana. I shall report to the debriefing immediately. ================================== Thanks for the kind words, yes, I see what you mean by it looking a little too much like a mountain, perhaps one day I'll revisit it and make a better one, but this one was good enough for me... Very very nice....love the xtra details....and the droids are awesome! Thank you! Love the FA reference! Thanks Josh! Yes...so close, it is... cool layout, I did feel a little bit lost during the first part of you story so an establishing shot would've helped. zooming in too much on the action hurts my brain a bit because i can't get a sense of the larger scene. I think there are some areas where you could've done more greebles and/or less printed tiles. if you connect the greebles more they won't stand out as much as individual parts, putting them in patterns helps, too. that door is excellent and the white/lbg walls have a nice repetition and smoothness to them. the dbg and trans red walls look great too, the best use of slopes is definitely in that upper level room where the transport has smashed through. I agree that the transport body is a bit too mountain-like. some curved bricks may have helped that some, or large wheels. I see all your points of what could have been better, I actually am really terrible at greebles, so I should practice those, I'll try to remember that for future builds. Thanks! ~Beltar Quote
Kodan Black Posted December 10, 2015 Posted December 10, 2015 I too am terrible at greebles, which is part of why I skip them entirely. I liked the builds, but the best part for me was how you integrated the story so well overall. Really gave it a bigger feel. Quote
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