MOC: Tavm, Revamped

[The Mugbearer]

Here's the quote from my own texts that has been written for "The Last Shelter" project:

Цитата:

Tavm is a brilliant inventor and weaponsmith from Spherus Magna. He became to this status thanks to The Great Beings, but in past he was one of Elder Barbarians from Desert. During the Core War Tavm has in some sort disappeared - he has been replaced with weak and shrewish Thpojah. But after meeting with Toa Mata Nui ex-weaponsmith has promised him that he'll teach Mata Mui in some unique sword techniques that only Barbarians of Desert knew and also reforge Tuma's sword that Mata Nui get as a trophy. In exchange with thisTavm asked Mata Mui to bring him his old form.

The changes in comparison with the old model is very impressive.

I has removed this stupid Tridax Sphere that originally belongs to one project, in which this thing was called Spere of Power. Now this shere is replaced by normal chest-plate and lots of parts that fills the empty space in the Phantoka torso. Also I has added on his back good old Life Counter (because here, on Spherus Magna, you never know where is time to die from multiple wounds =D).

I has changed lower torso, too, and also hips and feet joints. Also I has added on the legs two Pakari masks.

Orange Rahksi eyes has been replaced with blue ones and the neck now contains two balljoints and one axle.

Tavm is armed with axe and blade.

Moar pics:

C&C are welcome.

[Brickthing]

Nice build - especially those Pakari shins and the solid chest.

I think you need to make the building style of the limbs more consistent though, you're mixing small TECHNIC built thighs with Bionicle-built shins, and with much simpler arms. As you did with the shins, if you have one major "armour" piece per section then it would be clearer which pieces are meant to be details and which pieces can be ignored as construction pieces to make the model work (such as those half bushings on the thighs I think?).

The staff is nice as well, but the grey double socket piece looks out of place - you could try to find an alternative using silver/light grey pieces, even if it requires simplifying the staff structure a bit.

On a general and excusable note, if can avoid using blue pins it would make the colour schemes of your MOCs much stronger. That's difficult to do if you don't have many sets from earlier years, but it will make a big difference, even if you need to sink some money into a Bricklink order for a sizable number of black (and white ) friction pins.

Please keep on building your figures though - I enjoy seeing that at least you are still building BIONICLE characters after it has ended. That's something I think I should get back into doing.

[The Mugbearer]

Woah! Lots of constructive critique from respected user! Unexpectable honor for me, thank you very much!

I've got few more upcoming models, don't miss em!

On a general and excusable note, if can avoid using blue pins it would make the colour schemes of your MOCs much stronger. That's difficult to do if you don't have many sets from earlier years, but it will make a big difference, even if you need to sink some money into a Bricklink order for a sizable number of black (and white ) friction pins.

I am just a poor Russian Bionicle fan, as it said on MOCpages where I exist, too. So I have no money and experience to make my orders by my own. However, in April I has recieved a 51 balljoints from England. ^^

The staff is nice as well, but the grey double socket piece looks out of place - you could try to find an alternative using silver/light grey pieces, even if it requires simplifying the staff structure a bit.

Gotcha, will thin this over. =)

(such as those half bushings on the thighs I think?).

I just needed to cover the ends of black pins with those half-bushes. =)

And thank you again!