markus1984 Posted May 16, 2014 Posted May 16, 2014 This is the start of SoNE for my character Markus Montari and his friend Paul Brickstorm. On Nar Shaddaa beginns the Story for the two. First Freebuild - "Join the Empire" Paul and Markus use the early evening for some drinks in the next bar. As usual a lot going on tonight. Lady`s, beer, cyber shots and many, many more...... Later in the night Paul have the terrific idea to go in the next tattoo Studio - very clever in this state . Markus have some shots to much Markus is very amused to see pauls pained face, but he is the next The best remedy for pain is alcohol, so the two went`s back to the bar. After few minutes some Imperiale come`s in the bar to recruit new soldiers - the best time and place for this Next day, still not sober, to find the two actually back into a row in front of the imperial headquarter to join the empire. to be contineudto be continued....... on flickr you found the complete album. Thanks for watching my first part for SoNE. I have very much fun to build the first MOC and many ideas for the future. markus PS: Sorry guy`s, hope you understand my bad english and can follow the story Quote
Chills Posted May 16, 2014 Posted May 16, 2014 HAHAHA! Markus the story is just awesome. It reminds me of some of the time I spent in the Army. Thankfully I was quite sober when I signed up. Quote
Ninja Nin Posted May 16, 2014 Posted May 16, 2014 Very cool Bar design. And the medical droid can do tattoo work ! Quote
KevFett2011 Posted May 16, 2014 Posted May 16, 2014 Hi Markus, This is a vera good moc!The LEDs are used goodt and the story is funny. KevFett2011 Quote
Gerechtigkeitsliga Posted May 16, 2014 Posted May 16, 2014 Great Moc for a Freebuild. Nice details in the bar and Tattoo-Shop like the colour-glases. Quote
TWP Posted May 16, 2014 Posted May 16, 2014 Great MOC! You went building very big here for Just a freebuild. I wonder what your episode entry would be like! Quote
Brickmamba Posted May 17, 2014 Posted May 17, 2014 Luv the bar, and you have captured the atmosphere perfectly in the pictures Quote
markus1984 Posted May 17, 2014 Author Posted May 17, 2014 Thanks guys for the Feedback! The best idea to join the empire . markus Quote
goatman461 Posted May 17, 2014 Posted May 17, 2014 Great story, I really like how you started your guy off as a civilian, I wish I had thought of that, maybe I'll have to do some prequel freebuilds for my guy The entire build is really detailed and well designed. I especially like the lighting for the bar and the street at night. I can't wait to see more. Quote
markus1984 Posted May 18, 2014 Author Posted May 18, 2014 Thanks goeatman! Nice that you like the MOC. markus Quote
MstrOfPppts Posted May 20, 2014 Posted May 20, 2014 Great creation! I'm really glad the Empire got some talented recruits. There's a lot of detail and the bar is excellent. My favourite part is the outer wall of the bar! The reddish lighting in the bar shot is also a nice touch. The only thing that bothers me is that the dancer's pole ends in the air - it should go to the ceiling. The story is nice although I prefer MOCs showing just one moment of time. Speaking of which, this could simply be three seperate freebuilds with the tatooing and recruiting area seperated ... Quote
BEAVeR Posted May 21, 2014 Posted May 21, 2014 If I were a Rebel, I would be crying and muttering in a little corner right now. But luckily, I made the right choice as well and now I can be proud of the work of my comrades! It's a very interesting build with a well set up atmosphere. I like how you go from the rather clean and grey outside into the colorful and lively bar. This is especially emphasized with the lighting. The style of building is a little bit different too, because the closely packed lines are pretty much abandoned and make place for flat walls and slopes at the top. I'm not sure if I'm a bit fan of those flat walls, because that was an opportunity to give the bar a more chaotic and vibrant - in stead of industrial - look. There could be some kind of hologram... I don't really know. Anyway, I adore all the details like the rubbish around your table that sets it apart from the rest. Next up is the tattoo shop, with yet another beautiful technique for the walls and its very own style of decoration. I like how you've tried to include some sample artwork on the walls, but again it could be a little more crowded. But then again, the robot more or less runs the business, probably without much concern of how its store looks. Some kind of light like with the dentists would make sense though. No matter what, I like how your characters are progressing into a state where they just go and sit on the floor. And the tiny step at the door adds to the scene. One detail I like a lot is that all the figures have changed places between the two pictures of the bar. That was a really good idea, and it keeps things interesting! Anyway, the Imperial building is quite nice, especially with those delicious columns. But for the rest, I think that facade had a little bit more potential, maybe with some propaganda. but is the hothpotch of the style of the facade that bothers me most, because it just combines elements of the buildings we already saw, and doing that without much consistency. One final remark would be to make the steets a bit messier to, maybe with some thrown over garbage cans. Or maybe they just have a really good cleaning survice. But despite all the comments, I really like this build. I'm only trying to help to improve... just so that I can see more of it! Your build is as always amazing. And now I've learned to appreciate yet another one of your qualities: making good decisions, even when you're drunk. Quote
Bob De Quatre Posted May 21, 2014 Posted May 21, 2014 I'm a Rebel... And I don't find that MOC so impressive... Quote
markus1984 Posted May 21, 2014 Author Posted May 21, 2014 Many Thanks for your Feedback! And the best one is from Bob - thanks rebel :laugh: markus Quote
Bob De Quatre Posted May 21, 2014 Posted May 21, 2014 I'm better at making comments than making MOCs Quote
MKJoshA Posted May 24, 2014 Posted May 24, 2014 Wow, just wow. I am indeed in a corner crying over the loss of a potential rebel. Your builds are amazing. You deserve 15 points, not 5 for these 3 builds. Quote
Disco86 Posted May 25, 2014 Posted May 25, 2014 Looks like this will be the beginning of a legendary neverending tale Quote
King Aragorn Posted May 27, 2014 Posted May 27, 2014 This is an amazing story board and a very well done MOC! Quote
markus1984 Posted May 27, 2014 Author Posted May 27, 2014 Thanks guys for the comments!! markus Quote
Shadows of Nar Eurbrikka Posted August 1, 2014 Posted August 1, 2014 Judges have awarded you 5 XP! Your character's stats will be updated shortly. Quote
markus1984 Posted August 3, 2014 Author Posted August 3, 2014 Many thanks for the 5 points!! greetings markus Quote
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