Here's Chapter V; the most exciting, romantic, and violent chapter yet!

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/62162

Feedback is always read and appreciated!

Probably my favorite so far, then again i always love twists in stories.

Keep Up the Good Work

Probably my least favourite so far (building-wise that is), the monster is very good, but the scenery is, imho, boring. Story-wise it's good though, but I read these for the building quality, not the story quality. Sorry, just not my cup of tea I guess.

I've got to agree with Quarryman. Not your best build, but a fairly good story. (I at least read it for both story and build.)

My favorite builds had to be 1 and 4, though 2 and 3 are fine as well. I would like to request a few things though, seeing as you have not responded to me on Mocpages yet.

Could we have a picture of the creature please.

Thanks in advance!

-Zeph

Thanks you for the feedback.

Probably my least favourite so far (building-wise that is), the monster is very good, but the scenery is, imho, boring. Story-wise it's good though, but I read these for the building quality, not the story quality. Sorry, just not my cup of tea I guess.

Well, it was just supposed to be an open cavern, nothing fancy anway; I tried to make the ground as nice as I could. You shouldn't look at these if you're only looking intently on the MOC, not story. The story is the strong part, the MOCs just enhance the story. Thanks for your opinons, though.

I've got to agree with Quarryman. Not your best build, but a fairly good story. (I at least read it for both story and build.)

My favorite builds had to be 1 and 4, though 2 and 3 are fine as well. I would like to request a few things though, seeing as you have not responded to me on Mocpages yet.

Could we have a picture of the creature please.

Thanks in advance!

-Zeph

Thanks. I don't reply to MOCpage posts generally. Honestly, I'm not a fan of MOCpages because it seems to be over-run with, well, let's just say "Halo" MOCs. But that's a totally different topic.

Magma Creature:

My favourite chapter yet, the twist was very unexpected and I like how you did the lava. Another succesful addition to the series.

Your not a fan of mocpages? As far as I can tell it's your main site...

I don't really look at the bad mocs, so it seems fine to me. Anyways, thanks for the picture! The creature looks a lot better than I thought it did at first to tell you the truth!

Another fantastic part of JTTCOTE, those Lifelites are great! Your magma beast is pretty darn awesome too, and the story is really heating up.

~Peace

Probably my least favourite so far (building-wise that is), the monster is very good, but the scenery is, imho, boring. Story-wise it's good though, but I read these for the building quality, not the story quality. Sorry, just not my cup of tea I guess.

Alas, I must agree. It's good, but nothing too startalingly amazing that I gape at the screen (like with other JTTCOTE). The monster is just awesome though, nice use of the troll arms.

My least favorite of the seiries so far. No offense intended at all, but it just seems like a half-hearted addition. The MOC is okay, good SNOT techniques, maybe a little confusing. And the story was a little hard to follow, i thought the professor was with Mrs. Rommel. And it was really confusing when the monster popped out and grabbed the prof., i was like, "whats got him, where is it?" Still, a great creation.

Cool, my favourite chapter so far. And a cool creature, btw.

Edited June 29, 200816 yr by zero1312

My least favorite of the seiries so far. No offense intended at all, but it just seems like a half-hearted addition. The MOC is okay, good SNOT techniques, maybe a little confusing. And the story was a little hard to follow, i thought the professor was with Mrs. Rommel. And it was really confusing when the monster popped out and grabbed the prof., i was like, "whats got him, where is it?" Still, a great creation.

This is the climax of the story, don't expect too much more excitment. What's confusing? Can I explain anything for you?

This is the climax of the story, don't expect too much more excitment. What's confusing? Can I explain anything for you?

well, the proffesor pulling the gun on Mrs. Rommel and the doctor (or the dr. pulling the gun out on the proffessor and Mrs. rommel?) happened very suddenly, and there was no evidence of the proffeseor showing any signs of rebellion to the crystals or the journey. and when it happened so suddenly, I as the reader couldnt follow why he was doing that (i know it explains why, but its so confusing what his choice was) and... well, you get my point. The thing is, it was kind of thrown together, making it confusing. (remember, im not sayong this to be mean, just positive nit-picking). same thing with the monster popping out. But i suppose the main reason for this confusion is that its in writing, and is describing a LEGO creation, versus it being written in a book or seen in a movie. So it may just be the form of telling the story. And there wasnt really any suspense because it happened so quickly. Just my thoughts, please dont take this the wrong way.

Edited June 29, 200816 yr by JimButcher

well, the proffesor pulling the gun on Mrs. Rommel and the doctor (or the dr. pulling the gun out on the proffessor and Mrs. rommel?) happened very suddenly, and there was no evidence of the proffeseor showing any signs of rebellion to the crystals or the journey. and when it happened so suddenly, I as the reader couldnt follow why he was doing that (i know it explains why, but its so confusing what his choice was) and... well, you get my point. The thing is, it was kind of thrown together, making it confusing. (remember, im not sayong this to be mean, just positive nit-picking). same thing with the monster popping out. But i suppose the main reason for this confusion is that its in writing, and is describing a LEGO creation, versus it being written in a book or seen in a movie. So it may just be the form of telling the story. And there wasnt really any suspense because it happened so quickly. Just my thoughts, please dont take this the wrong way.

To start, this chapter wasn't thrown together, this was actually the first chapter I thought out. Next, it was Doctor Omaha who rebelled with a revolver, not the professor. Judging by my photography, I think it clearly explains that it's the Doctor, not Professor Beckett. Beckett is the good guy. Perhaps some of the confusion is because you didn't look at who was saying the lines? It wsa supposed to be sudden and ironic, that's the twist.

Though thank you for your feedback, I hope that helps. I apprecaite it! I enjoy this kind of feedback vs. "That was cool." More in-depth, you know.

Oh, yes thank you. I sometimes get characters confused, that was my fault. Dont get me wrong, it is a great story, keep it up, and I look foward to the last chapter. And your welcome for the feedback, it was my pleasure (to make you happy, not to nit-pick).

Oh, yes thank you. I sometimes get characters confused, that was my fault. Dont get me wrong, it is a great story, keep it up, and I look foward to the last chapter. And your welcome for the feedback, it was my pleasure (to make you happy, not to nit-pick).

The last chapter will be very short and small, but will fill in the missing lines, and nothing will be left unexplained.