[L9 - DS] The Crimson Emperor - Chapter 1

[Eternal Maul]

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On board of the destroyer The Eternal One, near the asteroid belt of Anaxes...

The mission by tuskenbricks, sur Flickr

"I was called to the central deck. Nothing too serious, I hope. The admiral knows me well and I haven't done anything foolish since weeks. Maybe it has something to do with that Tydirium shuttle who joined us a few days ago and dropped an "official". Some standard troopers assure that it is an Inquisitor ! Stupid regs... They don't understand that the Inquisitorius has fallen with our Emperor and Lord Vader, they were wielding the same obscur force.".

Mar' Cato comes to the end of a very long corridor, leading to a door.

"Finally there ! These hallways are all the same, it's a maze...".

The doors open in a quiet noise, revealing a large window framing the outer space. Two figures stand in front of it, in a way that could give shivers to anybody, including the usually calm scout officer. The deck is tensed. All this discomfort is directed towards the man behind the table. Wearing a black robe with crimson cape and gloves, he is silent. Mechanically, Mar' Cato drops a knee to the ground and bows. An Inquisitor, he feels it ! 

The mission by tuskenbricks, sur Flickr

Mar' Cato throws a quick glance to the admiral, waiting for a sign, but he looks as tensed as him. After seconds of clear muteness, a strong voice emerges from behind the helmet : "Gather your unit, officer, we leave as soon as you are ready.".

 

First episode of this story. 

[Sentinel_Brix]

14 hours ago, Eternal Maul said:

[...] Stupid regs... They don't understand that the Inquisitorius has fallen with our Emperor and Lord Vader, they were wielding the same obscur force." [...]

Great reference, I like that 

I was really looking forward to see Mar'Cato getting a promotion and here it is! 

Cool second entry after the prologue. The storytelling is great here. Can't wait to learn the origin of the Crimson Emperor and where Mar'Cato is going to be assigned. The New Republic needs to increase patrols when a dangerous Remnant starts to operate in their core territory 

Overall, the build is solid and the design of the table is standing out. 

 

[Professor Thaum]

I love your story idea... @Eternal Maul could you please develop this in the Darkside of the forum please.

A for the star background and for this "dark" desk.

 

Can't wait to see what's next !

[Eternal Maul]

Thanks you!

I did have many struggles for the table feet, i wanted a thin but very designed look.

2 hours ago, Professor Thaum said:

I love your story idea... @Eternal Maul could you please develop this in the Darkside of the forum please.

A for the star background and for this "dark" desk.

 

Can't wait to see what's next !

We can actually see the cracks of my phone screen I used for the stars background on the right corner.

Yes, i will give details in the ds forum.

[Professor Thaum]

1 hour ago, Eternal Maul said:

e can actually see the cracks of my phone screen I used for the stars background on the right corner.

Yeah I noticed the cracks... but I was still searching "why cracks here ? " I didn't thought the cellphone was the background

[Yperio_Bricks]

Distinctive window and very nice table design! I also really like the design of the inquisitor with the all black body and helmet and crimson gloves and cape. And I too saw the cracks, but thought it is some space phenomenon

And please @Eternal Maul add a avatar to your profile!

[Eternal Maul]

 

17 hours ago, Yperio_Bricks said:

Distinctive window and very nice table design! I also really like the design of the inquisitor with the all black body and helmet and crimson gloves and cape. And I too saw the cracks, but thought it is some space phenomenon

And please @Eternal Maul add a avatar to your profile!

Thanks and yes I will add one soon enough

[MKJoshA]

Some nice suspense built into your story. Well done with the window too.