JoeMI6 Posted January 31, 2006 Posted January 31, 2006 I wasn't sure if this should go in Space/Mecha or not, so correct me if i'm wrong. I've begun to write an Exo-Force story and will be posting in short snippets of it as often as i can. If anyone would perhaps like any of their sig-figs to cameo in it just ask. Happy Reading. (i will also try to take some pictures of main action scenes). Exo-Force: A New Dawn Chapter 1 Sev slowly pushed his foot down against the acceleration pedal of his Uplink Speeder, he was in complete control, and it was almost as if the vehicle was no mere machine, but an extension of his own self. Sev knew why he had been sent on this lone scout mission, the team did not fully accept him. They kept a wide berth wherever possible. They believed that his previous encounter with the Robots left scars that wouldn
LegoLover Posted January 31, 2006 Posted January 31, 2006 good start :biggrin: i liked it :-D it was a little short though :happy:
JoeMI6 Posted January 31, 2006 Author Posted January 31, 2006 It's not finished yet. Not by a long shot. :biggrin:
JoeMI6 Posted January 31, 2006 Author Posted January 31, 2006 Base A large commanding voice rang throughout the base.
crispen Posted January 31, 2006 Posted January 31, 2006 awesome! i like it alot.... but when you said "hulking blue battle machine" why did you call the grand titan blue? it is red.
Lord Thrawn Posted February 1, 2006 Posted February 1, 2006 I'm HarAm Resta, and I requested that my Grand Titan be blue, as my original mech in the Sentai Mountain RPG on BZPower was blue. I think it's a cool colour for that mech, and who says the mechs are not like cars in all different colours? Great job. Very enjoyable writing, and a gripping plot so far. And I'm in it! Yay!
Dragon King Posted February 1, 2006 Posted February 1, 2006 What is that Rpg about and were did you find it.
The Hordesman Posted February 1, 2006 Posted February 1, 2006 Very nice story! Its visible that you are better writer than me (hey, I do movie scripts and comic scripts, not books) its kind of a cool start (though Sev isnt a japanese name) and Im interested in reading more... Will you make pics for it later on? Im currently working with one which will have images... And one in form of the RPG here: http://s14.invisionfree.com/Exo_Force/index.php?showtopic=49 I would gladly see you anticipate :) Hmm... Toa Tilius... Vakhimetru and you seems to have struck the same thought.
JoeMI6 Posted February 1, 2006 Author Posted February 1, 2006 Thanks for the comments so far. I know Sev isn't a japanese name, he's my sig-fig. I wanted someone different from the Exo-Force mould to be the main character. There will be some pictures to come, but they'll be a bit behind the story and they'll have to be posted on brickshelf cause i can't seem to upload my pictures straight on here. I'll try to put regular updates on here. Keep reading! :smile:
JoeMI6 Posted February 2, 2006 Author Posted February 2, 2006 Then came a sight that strikes fear into even the most hardened pilots on the team. As the dust cleared they could all see the clear outline of the Thunder Fury battle machine. Feeling over confident from the previous conflict, Sev charged straight at the intimidating mech. It was as if the Stealth Hawk was moving in slow motion, it happened in one motion, the razor sharp blade possessed by the Thunder Fury cut the Gate Defender
Lord Thrawn Posted February 4, 2006 Posted February 4, 2006 Nice job. VERY nice job. This is some good writing, which is very rare these days (especially with all the l33t and txt tlk everywhere ) I very much enjoyed having a role. Thankyou very much. Keep reading everyone. Joe isn't done yet!
JoeMI6 Posted March 5, 2006 Author Posted March 5, 2006 I think i've kind of given up on this story,(someone can close this topic now) it's kind of hard thinking up new scenenarios, but in the meantime, check out my (finished) 'The Field' short story i just put up here.
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